For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Pickpo

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问题 For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled Pickpocketing. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.
    1.描述一下你在公共场所亲眼目睹的扒窃事件
    2.谴责这种不文明行为
    3.在构建和谐社会进程中,人人都应该有正义感
                        Pickpocketing

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答案                            Pickpocketing
    ①Yesterday, I witnessed a theft incident on my way home. While waiting for a bus, a woman took her wallet out and paid for a newspaper at a nearby newspaper booth. After putting her wallet back into her handbag and she began to look through the news titles when a middle-aged man brushed past her muttering "Excuse me". Swiftly, her wallet was in the man’s hand.
    ②The crazy pickpocketing has become a national epidemic and poses a grave threat to the residents’ and visitors’ property safety. Pickpocketing prevention, a daunting task for police, makes sense. All sides involved in this problem must join their efforts to remove this social cancer.
    ③Everyone share the huge responsibility for demonstrating their justice at proper time. Personal responsibility is vital to build a harmonious society.

解析     ①审题及布局。本文是一篇论说文。从文章的提示要求上看,应该首先对扒窃时间进行描述,随后对这种不文明的现象进行谴责,最后推导出主题,提出呼吁,即呼吁大家为建设文明社会共同努力。在布局上,根据题目中给出的提纲来展开即可。第一段描述在公共场所亲眼目睹的扒窃事件;第二段强烈谴责这种不文明行为;第三段呼吁大家共同努力,为消除扒窃行为做出自己的努力。②语言。通过分析扒窃事件,呼吁大家都应该为建设和谐社会而努力,做一个富有正义感的人。因此,在论述时,段落之内、句子之间要求运用能表示上下文语义关系的连词。语言要简洁、清新,极具鼓动性。
    ①描述一次亲眼目睹的事实,以此引出全文的主题。witness用词准确。brush此处为动词,说明小偷推挤的动作像刷子拂过般既轻又快,描述生动形象。Swiftly含有讽刺意味,与brush呼应,自然承接前一句。
    ②运用一些形容词,明确指出扒窃行为的危害性,如crazy,national epidemic和poses a grave threat to等词表现出此危害的严重性。 daunting和social cancer旨在谴责此类卑劣行径。
    ③呼吁大家携手努力,消除扒窃,共创和谐社会,点明文章主题。
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