雨声渐渐地住了,窗帘后隐隐的透进清光来。推开窗户一看,呀!凉云散了,树叶上的残滴,映着月儿,好似荧光千点,闪闪烁烁的动着。——真没想到苦雨孤灯之后,会有

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问题     雨声渐渐地住了,窗帘后隐隐的透进清光来。推开窗户一看,呀!凉云散了,树叶上的残滴,映着月儿,好似荧光千点,闪闪烁烁的动着。——真没想到苦雨孤灯之后,会有这么一副清美的图画!
    凭窗站了一会儿,微微地觉得凉意侵人。转过身来,忽然眼花缭乱,屋子里的别的东西,都隐在光云里;一片幽辉,只浸着墙上画中的安琪儿。——这白衣的安琪儿,抱着花儿,扬着翅儿,向着我微微的笑。

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答案     As the rain gradually ceased to patter, a glimmer of light began to filter into the room through the window curtain. I opened the window and looked out. Ah, the rain clouds had vanished and the remaining raindrops on the tree leaves glistened tremulously under the moonlight like myriads of fireflies. To think that there should appear before my eyes such a beautiful sight after the miserable rain on the lonely evening!
    Standing at the window for a while, I felt a bit chilly. As I turned round, I was suddenly dazzled before the bright light and could not see things distinctly. Everything in the room was blurred by a haze of light except the angel in a picture on the wall. The angel in white was smiling on me with a bunch of flowers in his arms, his wings flapping.

解析 1、本段以一种怀旧的心情追述往事,故应选用一般过去时为总体时态,保留原文的情调。
2、第1段第1句的“雨声渐渐地住了”可以译为The sound of rain gradually stopped,基本表达原文的意思,但失去了原文的诗情画意。译为the rain gradually ceased topatter,十分得体,富有诗意;用拟声词patter取代普通的sound,使读者如闻其声,与后面有关光的描写相映成趣,颇具匠心。“透进清光”译为a glimmer of light began tofilter into the room,十分得体。“清光”意为“清冷的光”,所以也可译为a glimmer ofcool light。
3、第1段第2句原文无主语,汉语中常见。翻译时应根据上下文意思补充主语以符合英语习惯。
4、第2句的“凉云”从上下文来看,应该就是带来雨水的云。本段文字描写的是夏天的夜晚,雨通常会带来些许凉意,所以采用解释性的翻译手段,将“凉云”译为rain clouds,合情合理。此句中的“散”字,可译为vanished或disappeared,若译为scattered,也很贴切。
5、“残滴”此处指残留的雨滴,保底译法直接译为remaining raindrops即可。若把“树叶上的残滴”译为raindrops lingering on the leaves也很得体,并颇具诗意。
6、“闪闪烁烁的动着”,主要描写夜光映照下的雨滴,颇有美感,译为glisten比较贴切,突出“闪烁”二字的意思。“千点”可译为myriads,也可译为countless。
7、第1段最后一句的“苦雨孤灯”属形容词移就这一修辞格,翻译时应尽量保持原文的风格,译为miserable rain on the lonely evening十分精确。“苦”字也可用melancholy翻译,突出原文作者的忧愁心态。
8、第2段第2句的“眼花缭乱”可译为I was dazzled and could not see anything clearly(distinctly)。“光云”指的是雨后的霁云,在夜晚显得分外明亮,故译为bright light;“幽辉”指的是清幽的冷光,故译为haze of light,突出其朦胧美的内涵。若加上pale一词,成为a haze of pale light,也十分妥当。
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