[originaltext]M: Well, Amina, thanks for letting me have your draft in such goo

M: Well, Amina, thanks for letting me have your draft in such good time.
W: Oh, that’s alright. I was just very anxious to hear what you think of it. You can see that I decided to change the topic—I had been interested in looking at Barings Factory
M: Oh, I think the hospital was a much better choice. In fact... well... I have to say that I thought it was good.
W: Oh ?
M: There’s still lots of work to be done... But there’re plenty of good ideas. It opens well and the first chapter is fine, but the middle section really stood out for me...most interesting.
W: That’s amazing because I really didn’t find it a bit easy to write.
M: How long did you work on the whole thing?
W: Well, I spent about two or three weeks reading and doing general research and then I completed it very quickly, so about four weeks in all.
M: Well, that’s normal for the course. You’ve got a while yet to make the changes. Let’s have a look at my notes here. OK, starting with section headings.., the broad divisions are good but you’ll have to redo the actual headings. I’ve made some suggestions in the margins. Now this information on local housing, I can see why you put it there but it really isn’t relevant to the approach you’ve taken.
W: I think I see what you mean.
M: And the interviews are very complex and rather unclear at the moment. You’re going to have to spend a bit of time making the data a lot clearer.
W: What about the list of dates?
M: My advice on that is to take them out. I feel it makes the whole piece appear too simplistic.